my Final Draft of first letter

[omgitscaro]

I'll probably be skewered for this by other members, but I think you've included way too much stuff about yourself. When I write a letter, I try to put myself in the shoes of the celebrity I'm writing to. If I have a stack of potentially hundreds of fan letters, would I prefer to read something quick, friendly, and to the point, or would I want to find a letter full of words that I'm forced to skim over to reach the final paragraph so I can learn what the heck you want me to sign so I can move on to the next letter?

I agree with this.

Also like many have said, take the "stalker" sentence out.

[smackedsillyxxx]

thanx for all the tips. does anyone have a sample letter I can look at? That would be awsome!

[bellicosejason]

Sample:

Hello, I'm _____ and I live in _____. I've been a big fan of your work for many years. I particularly like the movie/song _____ and I also love your work in _____.

I'm writing to you today to request an autograph. I would cherish it and frame it as to keep it safe from harm (or whatever you wanna say about how much it means to you). I have enclosed one of my favorite photos of you to possibly sign for me. If you could personalize the photo to me that would be a great added bonus. I have also enclosed a self addressed stamped envelope so you don't have to pay any postage.

Thank you for all your great roles/work/songs/videos/ yadda yadda and thank you for considering my request.

Sincerely,

________

[Jaffer]

^^ Thats a good sample, although might I suggest making it slightly longer in the part where you say why your a fan. For example, I have never seen a Daniel Day-Lewis movie, yet using that template I could say "I particularly like the movie Gangs of New York, and I also love your work in There will be blood".