'I' problem

TheMailman · Unread post by **TheMailman** » Fri Oct 20, 2006 7:10 pm

I've just written to someone and after reading it over, I have said 'I' way too many times. It can easily be noticed but I can't think of what else to say in it's place. Does anyone else get this problem?

x Pirates-Fan x · Fri Oct 20, 2006 7:15 pm

Me, myself, ummmmm thats all I can think of. Its a tricky problem.

x Pirates-Fan x

Logan-Autograph-Guy · Fri Oct 20, 2006 7:21 pm

Heres what I do... I do three paragraphs... one being the first one saying how great they are, what projects I've seen THEM in and my favorite movies tv shows of theirs. Second paragraph, about me but a shorter paragraph. Just my name, age and location and how I started auto collecting. The third paragraph, I ask for autograph.

That prob made no sense, but if it did, try it, I dont have that many I's lol

Unread post by **F.A.D.E** » Fri Oct 20, 2006 8:53 pm

You can write longer sentences using conjunction words such as and and but and avoid the I in the 2nd part of it.

Example:I absolutely loved your acting in xxx and (I) couldn't help shedding a few tears

Instead of starting a sentence with I end it with myself or me

Example:
I noticed... turnes into
It became very clear to me...

I hoping it made some sence - am having a bit trouble explaining this in English

Fatima xxx

MovieStar · Unread post by **MovieStar** » Sat Oct 21, 2006 8:14 am

My problem is that I say "that" too many times, and when I read it again, it heard funny. Then I say "great" lots of too.

rpbluesman · Unread post by **rpbluesman** » Mon Oct 23, 2006 11:15 am

My advise would be to keep your letters short and to the point. The less you write, the less chance of sounding stupid.

I would write a one paragraph letter. Make the first couple of sentences tell who you are. (Name, stuff like that) The next couple should tell why you are a fan of them (movies, music, etc). Then you need a sentence asking for an autograph (whether you are asking them for a signed photo, or you sent one yourself), and the last couple need to thank them for their time, and if you sent an SASE, mention it here.

So all in all, write about a 6-8 sentence letter.

Celebrities get loads of fanmail, and don't like to read all kinds of lenghty letters.

Another small note is, when you are mentioning their works, don't list everything they have done. The more you list, the less likely you are to be taken as a true fan.

dashiet · Unread post by **dashiet** » Mon Oct 23, 2006 6:22 pm

My problem is the exact opposite...I say "you" too much. You are great, blah blah, you did this..blah blah. I gave up on tryin to correct it cus I figured it's a fan letter, not an essay.

EugeneE · Unread post by **EugeneE** » Mon Oct 23, 2006 7:31 pm

I also have a problem with I. It seems that I use I lot in writing fanmail but it is also used in all the writing which I do.


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